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*********** <3 U) Interlude I:Ouji(Prince)-A FFXI Love StFollow

#1 Jun 10 2005 at 8:47 AM Rating: Excellent
AUTHOR’S NOTE: This is my first Interlude in ************ (I Love You)[/i], told from the girl’s point of view.

All though all dialogue is Japanese, I have placed it all in english for the sake of ease in understanding the emotions.

Part I (full text)
http://ffxi.allakhazam.com/journal2.html?user=385748&mid=1118071855825271130
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Aki X
http://ffxi.allakhazam.com/forum.html?forum=35&mid=1118072613119019026

Chapter XI
http://ffxi.allakhazam.com/forum.html?forum=35&mid=111815056226475773

Aki XII
http://ffxi.allakhazam.com/forum.html?forum=10&mid=1118242413200394994

Chapter XIII
http://ffxi.allakhazam.com/forum.html?forum=35&mid=111832408433071084

Please tell me what you think...this is rather experimental for me. I had been debating on if and where I should write this sort of passage in my story, and if it would detract from Demitri’s story any.

Dedicated to anyone who has ever wanted a fairy tale love story...and who hopes that they will find his or her own prince or princess someday.
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Interlude I: Ouji (Prince)
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"I came from far away."

"...I know we will meet again..."

The sun started to set on top of what I recognized as the Cradle of Life on what must have been the top of the world.

Turning away from that strange man, the first one that I bothered to interact with since I awoke from my dream.

My hair starting to whip up around me, I crossed my arms in an ‘x’ position, and started to say the words that I knew would take me away from here.

"Take me home."

The blackness lit up around me, and took me away from that piece of infinity, away to my adoptive home.


"How far away, I do not know."

Two years passed, and I saw him again in Tavnazia.

He destroyed my carefully laid plan, and saved that wretched Archduke from harm.

By all rights...I should have killed him. People who can stop you once from achieving your goals, can stop you again.

But instead...

But instead I gave him one of my most prized possessions, a snow lily flower.


"My name is Hitomi."

And then...in the Necropolis.

I thought I was dead.

Even now, in my nightmares I can see that dark elvaan standing over me, its twisted smile baring against my soul as its sword flashes down towards me.

Only...to be stopped by that mysterious paladin.

Who stepped between the two of us, and was willing to lay his life on the line for me despite all the trouble I had caused him in Tavnazia.

Who then carried my dying body out of that place...like a prince carrying the princess out from the top of the tower where she was locked away by the evil red mage in all of those fairy tales...


"...It means beautiful eyes."

The small lizard I was talking to took no note of my words, or even seemed to care about them. Instead, its small green body scurried along the dirt, leaving behind a faint wavy path from where its tail dragged along the ground. It reached a small hole created by two rocks leaning against each other and slipped inside instantly, away from my sight.

I got up from my half crouch, and made sure that Demitri was not aware that I was following him.

"From how he reacted to when he saw me in Rolanberry Fields, it was clear that he wanted nothing to do with me. Yet...I can’t leave him." I said to noone in particular.

Something awoke within me when I was being carried out in his arms.

Something that I didn’t know existed in me.


When I was sure he didn’t know I was right behind him, I got up and trekked my way forward a bit more, being sure to not make any noise.

Keeping pace with him, but just a little bit behind.

We traveled like that through all of Rolanberry Fields, the marshlands, and the highlands. During the nights, I would stand guard and protect him from the beastmen that were threatening to descend into areas.

What is this thing...this emotion...awakening within me?

I was not prepared for the destruction when we got to Gustaberg though.

All the loss of life...

With my heart in my throat, I realized sickeningly that I was right...what I had guessed that had happened back at the clinic was true...

That what I had wanted to prevent had happened.

Could this emotion be...Love?

But Love was an emotion removed from my people a long time ago...

My lords said that the tattoo burned into my skin on my breast showed to the world that I cannot Love, or ever be Loved.

They said that Love was a dangerous thing, that can bring incredible sorrow to all people across the world, and it interefered with a person’s thinking, making him or her do incredibly crazy things.

And that was why we were all forbidden to feel it.

But this feeling doesn't feel sad or horrible or like I am going insane...

It feels nice. Warm. Like an old blanket wrapped around me, enveloping my body and soul.


I watched him reach the bridge, and after a moment kneel over and throw up before he fell down to the ground and did not move.

"Demitri-chan!!!" I screamed. A sense of panic started to overwhelm me as I ran over to him, tripping constantly over the dead.

When I finally got to his body, I hastily turned him over and watched his chest carefully.

He was still breathing...

He was okay.

"Sorry...but I have to help you now. I can’t stay hidden any longer..." I whispered to him as I carefully picked up his body and his bags, and slowly trudged my way to the alternate bridge that I knew existed a bit further down the cliff-side. From there, it would be easy to leave him at the gates of Bastok where I knew the gate guards would find him.

No one will get you tonight. Not as long as I am there to protect you Demitri-chan.

After a couple hours, we finally arrived at a beaten path that I knew the guards undoubtedly walked along every so often in patrol.

Carefully, I laid him and his bags down, trying to make him as comfortable as possible.

Then...

Almost as an afterthought, I slipped another flower into one of his bags before I stepped back and hid out of sight.

From my hiding spot I watched until he was found and carried into the city.

-fin Interlude I: Ouji (Prince)

Edited, Fri Jun 10 09:49:45 2005 by Nightsintdreams

Edited, Fri Jun 10 10:20:45 2005 by Nightsintdreams
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#2 Jun 10 2005 at 7:18 PM Rating: Decent
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Please keep these coming, I love them ^^

I also like how you switched point of view to Hitomi, letting us see what she was thinking. It really adds that much more to the story. /clap! :D

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#3 Jun 10 2005 at 7:47 PM Rating: Excellent
*chuckles softly*

No no no...my character is on Bismarck (though I do have one on Lakshmi).

Its a reference to my Role Playing storyline.

You see...my character, Nights, asked someone out in RP, but was told he would have to keep up with her...because she is hard to follow.

So anyway, to make it short, the girl's soul got trapped in Promy-Holla, and wound up in Lufaise Meadows. Nights, anxious to get to her and save her...went after her alone.

Only instead of winding up on Lufaise Meadows, he wound up on the server Lakshmi instead. There, he is desperately trying to find a way back home to Bismarck, and to finally try to get an answer out of the girl that he asked out so long ago...

Hope that answers resolves your question^^;;
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#4 Jun 10 2005 at 9:01 PM Rating: Decent
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That's... err... really complex lol. I don't know how you keep track of that... o.O

Anyway, really-hard-to-understand RPing aside, you write well. Don't listen to people who say bad things about it, it is really good. ^^
#5 Jun 11 2005 at 12:52 AM Rating: Decent
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Good story so far Nights. Only wish the chapters were longer ^^. Liked how you threw in Hitomi's point of view. Didn't realize it was her's till I read it a second time.
#7 Jun 11 2005 at 10:53 AM Rating: Good
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Good story so far Nights. Only wish the chapters were longer ^^.



Me too! 'Cept, he dishes them out so quickly, I can't really complain... Plus, I like the suspense of wanting to read more.

Nights, you are so masterful! Even when I was on hiatus from FFXI, I'd always take a moment to check Alla for yer stories. They are amazing, and I can't wait to read the next chapter!

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#8 Jun 12 2005 at 5:07 AM Rating: Decent
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Wow. I read all the chapters tonight and I love where this is heading. You are very talented! :)

Keep them coming!! more more more!

Honestly though, I found love and lost love in Vana'diel. Your stories have brought back some wonderful memories. Please get the next installment in soon! ^.^
#9 Jun 12 2005 at 7:00 AM Rating: Good
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Honestly though, I found love and lost love in Vana'diel. Your stories have brought back some wonderful memories.


*nods gently* Trying to bring that feeling of love to people in Vana'diel is one of my goals when I am writing this story.

For although this may happen to be a story that traces Vana'diel through the Crystal War, and it may have a plot (that is only going to get more developed}...

The main focus of the story is and always will be the developing relationship of Hitomi and Demitri, and showing that true love has no bounds in language.

At the same time...I am trying to make the love story come alive in such a way that it might remind people of this line from an old Sinatra song:

Our love is like a fairy tale, and it has never been told before...

I'm the hopeless romantic sort in my writing...I blame my muse's whisperings in my ear for it...

Edited, Sun Jun 12 08:01:57 2005 by Nightsintdreams
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#11 Jun 12 2005 at 2:45 PM Rating: Good
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As always, Nights, your stories put a smile on my face.

Keep 'em coming, my friend.

--Arondight, Bismarck
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#12 Jun 12 2005 at 6:49 PM Rating: Decent
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I am really enjoying your stories, nw hurry up and write them faster!! ; ;
I hate waiting for the next one..
anticipation.. is makin me wait, makin me wait..
(its a song)
anyway, when is the next one gonna come out? XD
it reminds me of a movie series or something, its like,
what?! the next movie's not coming out untill next year!!!! omg!! NUUU
well, yeah,
hurry up!! ; ;
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