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********* (I love you): Chap one (Meeting)-A FFXI Love StoryFollow

#1 Apr 29 2005 at 6:08 PM Rating: Good
AUTHOR’S NOTE: This is my first true chapter story I guess…I was intending this only to be a one-shot story, like most of my works, but this time I couldn’t contain myself like that. In a lot of ways, this story is an awakening for me.

This is chapter one.

The series in total is called ************ (I love you)” in Japanese.

For now, I have decided to not provide a translation of what the girl says, because I want the readers to experience the story as the guy does.

Please, please, PLEASE give me feedback on this. I have never done this sort of story before, and I am thus very nervous about how it is going.

I will, however, be dedicating each chapter to a different person. I am dedicating this first chapter to my friend Rhia. Learning how you and and your fiancée met…I will never forget that.

I don’t anything related to Final Fantasy XI, and hopefully my Japanese will get better overtime.

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Chapter one (Meeting)
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We met on the top of the world.

I guess all stories have to have a beginning, and no matter how I start, that line always seems to come to mind first when it comes to ours.

We met at the top of the world.

Okay, maybe not exactly at the top of the world, but when you are at the top of the highest mountain in Attowa Chasm, it certainly does feel that way.

I was gazing out at the rising dawn that hung over the desert when she came up silently from behind out what seemed to be nowhere, and sat next to me.

I remembered the hawks circling overhead in lazy circles as the sky faded from a deep purple color slowly into a hue of orange.

We sat together like statues for what felt like hours, side by side, not saying anything, just watching the sun creeping its way up slowly.

Finally, I couldn’t take it any longer, and I looked over at her out of the corner of my eye.

The first thing that struck me about her was that she had long black hair tucked beneath an old pointed felt hat that fell down to the ground. Her body wasn’t thin, but wasn’t fat at the same time.

She didn’t bother to look back at me, but instead tucked a loose strand of hair behind her ear and stare out at the falling sun.

“utsukushii…” she whispered softly out of the blue, as if to no one in particular.

Her word caught me off guard. She spoke that other language? I have always heard of those that spoke a different language…yet had never encountered one of those people before.

Can she maybe also speak English?

I coughed slightly, and it appeared to catch her off guard.

“ano?...” she said softly, finally turning to look at me.

I pointed out at the horizon with my right hand, to where the sun had almost disappeared behind.

“Beautiful isn’t it…the red, orange, purple, all melding into one beautiful color show. Like someone took a bucket of paint, and splattered it everywhere…it takes my breath away.” I spoke slowly, carefully, in the faint hope that she might follow what I am saying.

She shakes her head in slight confusion, and looks at me with slightly squinting eyes.

“Watashiwa eotteelukotoo…watashiga kotowa litoshinaekotoo zennendealu. Watashio…keyoshinasai”

“You don’t understand me?” I say.

The look of further confusion on her face told me all. She couldn’t pick up on even a single word of it…

I tried quickly to be able to think of a way to get what I was trying to say through to her, in a way that she would be able to understand…and then a brilliant idea striked me.

I got up slowly, not bothering to brush the dust from my pants where it had gathered from the hours of sitting. I treaded carefully behind her, and then squatted down behind her. I then took her left hand, and immediately felt her stiffen up for a moment.

“Trust me.” I say slowly, with no hint of threat in my voice.

She seemed to pick up on the meaning of what I said, and her hand then relaxed in my grip.

I pointed her hand up at the sky.

“Sky.” I say that slowly, carefully.

She nods slightly in response, accidentally causing a few stray strands of her long hair to brush against my face.

She smelt like rolanberries.

I then moved her hand over to the glimmering orb that was hanging in the sky.

“Sun.”

Again she nodded slightly, and I could swear that I could see the corners of her lips curl upwards slightly, even from behind.

I then took her hand and drew it in a wise brush arc across the sky.

“Beauty.”

“aaaaa!” She exclaimed happily.

“Ochilukalaoyobi…otsukushii-shyonikon goosulu shyokunosubite…”she said in those words that I couldn’t possibly hope to understand.

Did she get what I was trying to say?

Did my idea work?

She then turned around, and looked at me.

I could see by the look on her face that she had figured out what I was trying to say.

We smiled for a moment at each other, and then she stood up.

She leaned in closely to me, and then whispered into my right ear, “Watashiwa ima ikanakelebanlanaihoshiga soleokisadasuleba, watashiga kakukanelude ********************** aukotoo kotoo.”

She pulled back quickly, and then tossed me a wink. She then crossed her arms in front of her in an “X” position, and closed her eyes while tilting her head skyward.

“Watashio tsulesalinasai.” She whispered, and then a black orbish glow of energy came out of her, surrounding her, and then swallowed her whole, causing her to disappear without leaving a trace.

Save the faint smell of rolanberries.

I remember the thoughts going through my head of who was she, and will I ever see her again.

But little did I know at the time…

That was only the beginning.

-End: Meeting
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#2 May 23 2005 at 3:33 PM Rating: Decent
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Just this little excert is enough to make me a fan for a while.

Frankly, this is amazing. Please keep up the amazing work!
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